ChazBee Posted January 4, 2018 Share Posted January 4, 2018 You are not the girl I loved The girl I loved was so mild and mindful of me. Always looked at my face and checked on my feelings She fought the world with and for me The girl I loved isn't you. I was sure of the girl I loved, certain that she had me and I had her. We were ready to conquer the world and didn't mind living alone in it. You are not the same girl I loved Cos she was scared of losing me, didn't think she was good enough for me Cos I was too cute and smart for her, didn't think I'd settle for her type But she knew I loved her and she loved me in return. You're not the girl I was in love with We shared a life of absolute joy and happiness, people envied us some snubbed at us, we loved each other and we felt safe in our hands. Our hearts pounded alike, you were my world and I was yours. But then the girl I loved changed You began to make loving you a scary thing to do. You look at me with too much hatred, snapped at me with in violence. I began to live without you, how hard and unbearable that has been. I miss the girl I loved, if she can just look at me with love just even if for one more time But am now the girl I love cos you taught me to value me first. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators kimi Posted January 4, 2018 Moderators Share Posted January 4, 2018 Awwwwh.... I love how the story ends #selflove Kudos! 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VINA Posted January 4, 2018 Share Posted January 4, 2018 Wtf! This is everything, How can you aptly capture the feelings and emotions of someone you dont even know? This is so exact it's creepy. Nice one. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hawken Posted January 5, 2018 Share Posted January 5, 2018 You may have done something wrong? Maybe you changed first? and her change is a reaction to yours? Maybe she is going through stuff and you are the one who doesn't have her back anymore. it is a beautiful well written poem. But while reading, it stuck out that the character expects her lover to remain the same person through the years. I know there are a lot of angles but this is just one i am looking at. Well done Chazbee! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChazBee Posted January 5, 2018 Author Share Posted January 5, 2018 10 hours ago, kimi said: Awwwwh.... I love how the story ends #selflove Kudos! Thanks Kimi dear Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChazBee Posted January 5, 2018 Author Share Posted January 5, 2018 9 hours ago, vina said: Wtf! This is everything, How can you aptly capture the feelings and emotions of someone you dont even know? This is so exact it's creepy. Nice one. I have this feeling that humans are connected in different ways, we just react differently and fight with different weapons. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChazBee Posted January 5, 2018 Author Share Posted January 5, 2018 52 minutes ago, Hawken said: You may have done something wrong? Maybe you changed first? and her change is a reaction to yours? Maybe she is going through stuff and you are the one who doesn't have her back anymore. it is a beautiful well written poem. But while reading, it stuck out that the character expects her lover to remain the same person through the years. I know there are a lot of angles but this is just one i am looking at. Well done Chazbee! Thank you Hawken, there's no angle here dear, have always wanted to let this outta my mind for a while and I just did. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Administrators FlyJ Posted January 5, 2018 Administrators Share Posted January 5, 2018 20 hours ago, ChazBee said: You are not the girl I loved The girl I loved was so mild and mindful of me. Always looked at my face and checked on my feelings She fought the world with and for me The girl I loved isn't you. I was sure of the girl I loved, certain that she had me and I had her. We were ready to conquer the world and didn't mind living alone in it. You are not the same girl I loved Cos she was scared of losing me, didn't think she was good enough for me Cos I was too cute and smart for her, didn't think I'd settle for her type But she knew I loved her and she loved me in return. You're not the girl I was in love with We shared a life of absolute joy and happiness, people envied us some snubbed at us, we loved each other and we felt safe in our hands. Our hearts pounded alike, you were my world and I was yours. But then the girl I loved changed You began to make loving you a scary thing to do. You look at me with too much hatred, snapped at me with in violence. I began to live without you, how hard and unbearable that has been. I miss the girl I loved, if she can just look at me with love just even if for one more time But am now the girl I love cos you taught me to value me first. Love it! Love it! 💝🌟🌟. Thanks for sharing! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChazBee Posted January 5, 2018 Author Share Posted January 5, 2018 3 hours ago, FlyJ said: Love it! Love it! 💝🌟🌟. Thanks for sharing! Am glad you like it. It's absolutely my pleasure Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChazBee Posted March 1, 2018 Author Share Posted March 1, 2018 On 04/01/2018 at 11:46 PM, vina said: Wtf! This is everything, How can you aptly capture the feelings and emotions of someone you dont even know? This is so exact it's creepy. Nice one. I glad you can relate Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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