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You are not the girl I loved

The girl I loved was so mild and mindful of me.

Always looked at my face and checked on my feelings

She fought the world with and for me 

The girl I loved isn't you. 

I was sure of the girl I loved, certain that she had me and I had her.

We were ready to conquer the world and didn't mind living alone in it.

You are not the same girl I loved

Cos she was scared of losing me, didn't think she was good enough for me

Cos I was too cute and smart for her, didn't think I'd settle for her type

But she knew I loved her and she loved me in return.

You're not the girl I was in love with

We shared a life of absolute joy and happiness, people envied us some snubbed at us, we loved each other and we felt safe in our hands. Our hearts pounded alike, you were my world and I was yours.

But then the girl I loved changed

You began to make loving you a scary thing to do.

You look at me with too much hatred, snapped at me with in violence. 

I began to live without you, how hard and unbearable that has been.

I miss the girl I loved, if she can just look at me with love just even if for one more time

But am now the girl I love cos you taught me to value me first.

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Wtf! This is everything,

How can you aptly capture the feelings and emotions of someone you dont even know? This is so exact it's creepy.

Nice one.

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You may have done something wrong? Maybe you changed first? and her change is a reaction to yours? Maybe she is going through stuff and you are the one who doesn't have her back anymore.

it is a beautiful well written poem.

But while reading, it stuck out that the character expects her lover to remain the same person through the years. I know there are a lot of angles but this is just one i am looking at.

Well done Chazbee!

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9 hours ago, vina said:

Wtf! This is everything,

How can you aptly capture the feelings and emotions of someone you dont even know? This is so exact it's creepy.

Nice one.

I have this feeling that humans are connected in different ways, we just react differently and fight with different weapons. 

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52 minutes ago, Hawken said:

You may have done something wrong? Maybe you changed first? and her change is a reaction to yours? Maybe she is going through stuff and you are the one who doesn't have her back anymore.

it is a beautiful well written poem.

But while reading, it stuck out that the character expects her lover to remain the same person through the years. I know there are a lot of angles but this is just one i am looking at.

Well done Chazbee!

Thank you Hawken, there's no angle here dear, have always wanted to let this outta my mind for a while and I just did. 

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20 hours ago, ChazBee said:

You are not the girl I loved

The girl I loved was so mild and mindful of me.

Always looked at my face and checked on my feelings

She fought the world with and for me 

The girl I loved isn't you. 

I was sure of the girl I loved, certain that she had me and I had her.

We were ready to conquer the world and didn't mind living alone in it.

You are not the same girl I loved

Cos she was scared of losing me, didn't think she was good enough for me

Cos I was too cute and smart for her, didn't think I'd settle for her type

But she knew I loved her and she loved me in return.

You're not the girl I was in love with

We shared a life of absolute joy and happiness, people envied us some snubbed at us, we loved each other and we felt safe in our hands. Our hearts pounded alike, you were my world and I was yours.

But then the girl I loved changed

You began to make loving you a scary thing to do.

You look at me with too much hatred, snapped at me with in violence. 

I began to live without you, how hard and unbearable that has been.

I miss the girl I loved, if she can just look at me with love just even if for one more time

But am now the girl I love cos you taught me to value me first.

Love it! Love it! 💝🌟🌟.

Thanks for sharing! 

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3 hours ago, FlyJ said:

Love it! Love it! 💝🌟🌟.

Thanks for sharing! 

Am glad you like it. It's absolutely my pleasure 

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On 04/01/2018 at 11:46 PM, vina said:

Wtf! This is everything,

How can you aptly capture the feelings and emotions of someone you dont even know? This is so exact it's creepy.

Nice one.

I glad you can relate 

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