fairy Posted December 17, 2015 Share Posted December 17, 2015 Story Update! Misconceptions “Cara?” Alesha had recognized her. After seven years and she recognized me easily? O my! Flashing a smile, Cara waved her hand beckoning on Alesha to come sit with her. She was determined to act normal, as though nothing had happened. Alesha walked up to her and sat. She looked at Cara for what seemed like a minute then as if on impulse, sent a slap burning stings across Cara’s face… Read. Like. Comment. https://myrainbowdiaryblog.wordpress.com/2015/12/17/misconceptions/ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lala1990 Posted December 18, 2015 Share Posted December 18, 2015 Nice story But it's kind of disjointed. I don't know how to write, so take my critique with a pinch of salt. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fairy Posted December 18, 2015 Author Share Posted December 18, 2015 Yea, thanks hun. I needed that criticism. I wasn't settled with the story either. Thank you for your honesty. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators kimi Posted December 18, 2015 Moderators Share Posted December 18, 2015 It's why I haven't commented yet... You take criticism very well. I usually would rather withhold a comment than brave it and critique. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lala1990 Posted December 18, 2015 Share Posted December 18, 2015 I've noticed you shy away from anything that can cause confrontation. Moreover Fairy writes amaz-balls stories, and the story is good. I just had a hard time knowing when the past ended and present started from. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators kimi Posted December 18, 2015 Moderators Share Posted December 18, 2015 Hahaha! You noticed quite accurately *wry smile* The girl is a genius! As in, it almost got my head mixed up Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hawken Posted December 18, 2015 Share Posted December 18, 2015 *agama eyes* Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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